2014년 10월 26일 일요일

The First Draft

  

  Recently, in south-west Africa Ebola viruses are broken up. Not only Africans are infected but many foreigners are infected too. On August in USA, the argue about returning of doctor Kent Brantly who contracted the Ebola virus at Liberia was hot issue. At this point, we have to consider whether infectious disease, like Ebola, patient should return to their home country. Most countries make the patient return to their home country although there is a undeniable hazard, flow of the infectious disease to the country. Of course, there is just a bad situation when the infectious patient returned to their country. The returned patient sometimes get better than before thanks to his or her country's great medical system. Nonetheless, there is one fact that is nothing to sneeze, flow of the disease. I think It is valuable to discuss whether the infectious patient have to be returned to their country.

  People already know about Ebola virus is one of the most fatal disease in the world. They also are aware of there is no appropriate vaccine and Ebola virus is very contagious. Recently, American doctor, Kent Brantly who is contracted by the Ebola virus, returned to the USA although many Americans disagree to his return. Like this, people have already known about the seriousness of Ebola virus, but they disagree with the return of the Ebola patient. Some people said that government have to protect their people. Other people said that the risk of return is impossible to ignore. I will focus on the safety of people and the real duty of government. If i'm right, the government should review their system about Ebola virus. Also people should reconsider the government's duty and their safety. They have to reconsider about the priority to the government. The government would try to build systematic and effective disease control system. If I'm right and people ignore me, Ebola virus would flow in Korea and many people would be in danger. Besides Ebola virus, there would be another more serious infectious disease. If people ignore me, they would do like what they did. They would commit the fatal mistake again.

  The government have a duty to protect their people. To this thesis, many opponents would criticize that the patient is also their people. In this thesis, my focused point is the safety. The government have to protect their people from many danger. For example, the government should protect their people from Ebola disease. The government should keep in mind that Ebola has powerful contagiousness and there is no appropriate vaccine.
  In Korea, there is no systematic disease control system. The reason that USA let patients return to the USA is that they have systematic control disease center and they are convinced their control disease system can do their role. However, the Korea control disease center doesn't have enough information about Ebola and they don't have much experience that control the serious infectious disease. The USA CDC has studied Ebola virus and vaccine for a long time and they have various experience. In addition, I can't trust the Korea's CDC. There are some examples; Last august one man entered to the Korea in Busan. The man was from Liberia where the Ebola virus is spread. Suddenly, the man disappeared. People were anxious and criticized the government. The government should keep in mind the man's location and identity because he is possible to be a Ebola patient. This case showed that the government doesn't do their role well. Like this the Korea CDC are not systematic and effective. How people trust them and let the patient return to Korea?

  Many opponents would criticize my opinion. They argue that the government couldn't ignore their people's death and the protection of the government is ethical. In addition, they support their argument by USA's return. The patient who is returned to the USA was treated well and got better than before. It is unignorable fact, but it is the case of the USA. As i said before, the USA has the greatest medical system and control disease center. They have studied ebola virus and vaccine for a long time. Their studies is not compatible to other countries, so the patient could get better. In Korea,there is not enough studies about Ebola. If the patients are returned to the Korea, there would be more dangerous than lucky. Furthermore, the government consider which choice can be more effective and safe. To protect people from infectious disease, the best way is to blockade. It sounds too violent and inethical. I just express my idea. I don't think my opinion is always truth. I propose just one hypothesis. In my opinion, the ebola patient's return is not right.

  I argue whether the Ebola patient should return to their country. This topic is very important because the Ebola virus is now a very serious issue in the world. The Ebola virus spread very fast. Nonetheless, the appropriate vaccine have not invented yet. In this case, prevention is the best way to protect people from the disease. To do so, the government should reconsider the patient's return. Also they have to try to build systematic and effective medical system and control disease center. My argument could sounds violent and inethical, but this way is the effective way to us in this situation. Through my argument, I want the government review their system and the opportunity to protect people from enormous danger. There is adage, 'Look before you leap'. I think this time is to look before you leap.
 

The Conclusion

I argue whether the Ebola patient should return to their country. This topic is very important because the Ebola virus is now a very serious issue in the world. The Ebola virus spread very fast. Nonetheless, the appropriate vaccine have not invented yet. In this case, prevention is the best way to protect people from the disease. To do so, the government should reconsider the patient's return. Also they have to try to build systematic and effective medical system and control disease center. My argument could sounds violent and inethical, but this way is the effective way to us in this situation. Through my argument, I want the government review their system and the opportunity to protect people from enormous danger. There is adage, 'Look before you leap'. I think this time is to look before you leap.

The Refutaiton and Concession

Many opponents would criticize my opinion. They argue that the government couldn't ignore their people's death and the protection of the government is ethical. In addition, they support their argument by USA's return. The patient who is returned to the USA was treated well and got better than before. It is unignorable fact, but it is the case of the USA. As i said before, the USA has the greatest medical system and control disease center. They have studied ebola virus and vaccine for a long time. Their studies is not compatible to other countries, so the patient could get better. In Korea,there is not enough studies about Ebola. If the patients are returned to the Korea, there would be more dangerous than lucky. Furthermore, the government consider which choice can be more effective and safe. To protect people from infectious disease, the best way is to blockade. It sounds too violent and inethical. I just express my idea. I don't think my opinion is always truth. I propose just one hypothesis. In my opinion, the ebola patient's return is not right.

2014년 10월 25일 토요일

The Confirmation

 The government have a duty to protect their people. To this thesis, many opponents would criticize that the patient is also their people. In this thesis, my focused point is the safety. The government have to protect their people from many danger. For example, the government should protect their people from ebola disease. The government should keep in mind that ebola has powerful contagiousness and there is no appropriate vaccine.   
 In Korea, there is no systematic disease control system. The reason that USA let patients return to the USA is that they have systematic control disease center and they are convinced their control disease system can do their role. However, the Korea control disease center doesn't have enough information about ebola and they don't have much experience that control the serious infectious disease. The USA CDC has studied Ebola virus and vaccine for a long time and they have various experience. In addition, I can't trust the Korea's CDC. There are some examples; Last august one man entered to the Korea in Busan. The man was from Liberia where the ebola virus is spread. Suddenly, the man disappeared. People were anxious and criticized the government. The government should keep in mind the man's location and identity because he is possible to be a ebola patient. This case showed that the government doesn't do their role well. Like this the Korea CDC are not systematic and effective. How people trust them and let the patient return to Korea?

The narration

1. What do people already know about my topic?
- Ebola virus is one of the most fatal disease in the world. There is no appropriate vaccine and Ebola virus is very contagious. Recently, American doctor, Kent Brantly who is contracted by the ebola virus, returned to the USA although many americans disagree to his return.

2. What research has already been done about my topic?

3. What are the implications of my argument (What if I’m right? What if I’m right and people ignore me?)
- If i'm right, the government should review their system about ebola virus. Also people should reconsider the government's duty and their safety. They have to reconsider about the priority to the government. The government would try to build systematic and effective disease control system.  If I'm right and people ignore me, ebola virus would flow in Korea and many people would be in danger. Besides Ebola virus, there would be another more serious infectious disease. If people ignore me, they would do like what they did. They would commit the fatal mistake again.

<Narration>

People already know about ebola vrius is one of the most fatal disease in the world.
They also are aware of there is no appropriate vaccine and Ebola virus is very contagious. Recently, American doctor, Kent Brantly who is contracted by the ebola virus, returned to the USA although many americans disagree to his return. Like this, people have already known about the seriousness of ebola virus, but they disagree with the return of the ebola patient. Some people said that government have to protect their people. Other people said that the risk of return is impossible to ignore. I will focus on the safety of people and the real duty of government. If  i'm right, the government should review their system about ebola virus. Also people should reconsider the government's duty and their safety. They have to reconsider about the priority to the government. The government would try to build systematic and effective disease control system.  If I'm right and people ignore me, ebola virus would flow in Korea and many people would be in danger. Besides Ebola virus, there would be another more serious infectious disease. If people ignore me, they would do like what they did. They would commit the fatal mistake again.

2014년 10월 20일 월요일

The introduction



 
   Recently, in south-west africa ebola viruses are broken up. Not only africans are infected but many foreigners are infected too.  On August in USA, the argue about returning of doctor Kent Brantly who contracted the ebola virus at Liberia was hot issue.  At this point, we have to consider whether infectious disease, like Ebola, patient should return to their home country. Most countries make the patient return to their home country although there is a undeniable hazard, flow of the infectious disease to the country. Of course, there is just a bad situation when the infectious patient returned to their country. The returned patient sometimes get better than before thanks to his or her country's great medical system. Nonetheless, there is one fact that is nothing to sneeze, flow of the disease. I think It is valuable to discuss whether the infectious patient have to be returned to their country.
 

2014년 10월 6일 월요일

Classical Argument Outline

The Introduction


I will state the current situation of Ebloa virus : The Ebola virus was broken out in the South Africa, February, 2014. Since February, the Ebola virus has been spread to some countries of the Southafica rapidly. According to WHO, 5762 persons contracted to Ebola , and 2746 patients died due to the Ebola so far. In August, the American doctor, Kent Brantly, who is contracted by Ebola returned to the USA to treat. It was the first time that Ebola patient came to the USA. Many Americans worried about his returning. 
At this point, I wonder whether infectious disease, like Ebola, patient should return to their home country.

The narration

I will summarize the current rule of Korea when Korean contracts the international infectious disease in abroad. I will state the reaction of Americans toward the returning of Ebola patients.

The confirmation

I will support my argument by the examples. The examples are the cases that the infectious disease spread by entrance of patient. Also I will summarize the current situation of Korea, lack of medical system. 

The refutation and concession

I will state the opponent's argument ; the case of America I will refute this by the lack of Korea medical system. I will emphasize the case of Korea. In addition, I will the case of first outbreak of Ebola in the USA

The summation 

I will end my essay by summarizing the current situation of Ebola. I will emphasize that Korea is also in danger, we have to be ready to Ebola viruses.